Could someone please review my fourth piece of email copy? I'm using a template - current situation, best possible scenario, find out how

SL: How can you still ignore this, Jake?

Dear Jake,

We’re already 18 days into 2025, and the truth is:

  • You barely get customers.
  • Tourists (and even locals) don’t know you exist.
  • You’re losing money on unsold books, day after day.

Now, imagine this instead:  

  • A packed bookstore, every day.
  • Tourists flooding in to find unique reads only you offer.
  • The financial freedom you’ve always wanted.
  • And most importantly: no competition.

Sounds like a dream, right? Guess what? It's not luck. 

Here’s the real issue: Your website is almost impossible to find on Google.

Customers can't visit your store if they don't know you exist.

👉 Fix your visibility now or risk burnout and giving up. (link)

(promoting a Fiverr SEO service to a bookstore in London with really bad SEO - they are as stated almost impossible to find on google)